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July 28, 2007

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Janet

Great first entry, Mike!
Love the meditation that develops with an activity like your hiking. I think we all need that removal from our day-to-day life routine to help us step back and experience a more primeval approach to life and remind us of our connection to the Earth.
A hearty Wordcrafters Welcome to you!
(I just had to write that for my own chuckle!!)

Laraine

The bigness of the last paragraph is terrific that begins "We cross a mountain stream..." It's beautiful and brings a genuine emotional impact to the story. There's a nice balance of detail and description throughout that flows steadily to the end. I enjoyed reading this very much.

Elizabeth

Thanks so much for writing in such great detail. For painting a BIG picture. I felt as if I were on the hike with you and your cousin -Thanks! And the way the whole thing "crescendoed" - great!
Some of my favorite strings of words were:
"...everything needed to earn its place ..."
"Funny thing about these trips, ..."
"This trip was different than the others, it was a return trip."
"Like when the alarm goes off in the morning ...'
"Soon, by drinking that water, we would became part of those mountains.

fitz

What a great way to start your blog. You paint a heck of a picture, and you do a good job mixing in the small details of hiking with some deep and profound thinking.

I think your last paragraph is kind of long compared with the others; plus, shorter paragraphs will showcase and highlight your wise and subtle thoughts about the earth and our debt to it.

Now, how are you going to top this one?

elizabeth cobblah

I kept waiting for an experience on the hike that would bring you and your cousin closer to each other, but at the end I realize it is the hike and the mountain themselves that bring you together! I like the role of the water.

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