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July 20, 2007

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Janet

Sweet...

Laraine

I love the energy of your writing. It absolutely flows! The last sentence comes as a surprise. It contradicts what you've elegantly proven in the previous paragraphs: that you are equals, counting on each other to pick up the slack. Whereas the last sentence expresses subordination. I wonder if what you were aiming for was gratitude or humility?

elizabeth cobblah

Your partner's actions express the same sentiments that you expressed about him in writing! The reader feels his sense of gratitude and the reciprocity in your life!!
I think I agree with Laraine and would say you could leave off the last paragraph altogether. It's extra.

Denise

I am laughing at the subordination comment Laraine! I went back and tried to read it with an outside perspective, and I think I can see where that might come through. But honestly, I know Fitz feels the same way, so it is equality there. We fill in eachother's gaps, while at the same time each offering our own 'extra' qualities to the partnership. There are definitely gaps on both sides that need to be filled (I will refrain from listing Fitz's gaps!)

Fitz

Yes. Please refrain. Nobody want to read a long entry:)

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